Nights into hedgehog: winter dream incident

[teamrandom21 26]

act 1

 

Even in mobious sonic and the gang would find themselves facing harsh winter weather conditions.

“uh…I hate this weather.” Said sonic going into the Freedom fighters HQ, shivering.

“well no wonder! Put something like a jacket or snow gear on sonic! You’re going to get a cold!”

“she’s got a point sonic…” said sally. Sonic just ignored the two. He didn’t know why but amy and sally where getting on his case lately about things.

“hey tails, any sign of eggman.” Sonic said going over to tails.

“no, surprisingly he hasn’t really been up to much…”

This was more than true. Back at eggman’s layer he tried thinking of a good plan to defeat sonic and the freedom fighters.

“something the wrong doctor eggman?” asked orbot.

“yes! I bet those freedom fighters are wondering why I haven’t attacked them.”

“well, why haven’t you?” asked orbot.

“because I’m tired of failing orbot! I want something that can help me defeat sonic or give the freedom fighters a run for their money, not just a bunch of badniks going in and falling more for the over 9000^th time.”

“well, it is a good idea to sort of strategize some sort of idea that will really work.”

“yeah, you’re right, but what…”

A portal suddenly opened up in doctor eggman’s layer.

“what is the meaning of this!” said doctor eggman, standing back in fear.

Back at freedom fighters HQ, nighttime had fallen. sonic and tails went out and looked at the stars, just to get there mind off things.

“you feeling better bud?” asked sonic.

“yeah…” said tails. “I’m glad shadow got maria back, though it would have been nice if he asked us to borrow the emeralds, or just told us the situation.”

“we probably wouldn’t have believed him to be honest…”

“well, I hope more of those we lost in the old world come back.”

“same here. Stupid genesis reboot. No wonder we’re keeping an eye on eggman more closely.”

Just then, Nights came down from the sky to greet sonic and tails.

“hey sonic, hey tails.”

“nights! Long time no see.” Said sonic.

Sonic and tails knew nights fairly well. She was a dream guardian who would try to chase away bad dreams from those who had them in mobious.

“I’m glad I ran into you two, I need your help.”

“ok nights, we’re all ears.”

Back at doctor eggman’s layer, wizemen the wicked had entered doctor eggman’s layer.

“who the heck are you!” said eggman.

“I am wizemen the wicked. I’d like you’re with something doctor eggman, something involving getting rid of that hedgehog and his gang.”

“I’m all ears…” said doctor eggman with a smile.

 

act 2:

 

Sonic and tails lead dreams into the freedom fighters HQ quietly as just about everyone was asleep.

“so what do you need our help with?” asked sonic.

“you know the chaos emeralds that you have in this world?” said nights.

“yeah…”

“wizeman made something similar to it in the dream world, known as the dream emerald. Because of it, he’s become very powerful.”

“so he made something like a chaos emerald in the dream world and is using it?”

“I know it’s hard to believe, trust me, but it’s true. It’s because of this power that I’ve been banished from the dream world. While I can survive in the real world for a while, without me protecting nightopia bad things will happen…”

“how are we gonna get into the dream world though?” said tails.

“as long as I’m around and you two are asleep, the portal is there. I can’t enter it with you however, every time I do I get knocked back.”

“well then, let’s take care of this wizman!” said sonic.

Outside the freedom fighters window was Fiona, bean, and bart lessoning in.

“huh, dreamtopia.” Said Fiona. “and can enter dreams as long as where near her…”

“come on Fiona you’re not going to do this are you?” said bart.

“you bet I am! Come on guys, tails is still head over heels for me. I bet with enough flirting and convincing he’ll be a part of our little group, and trust me, we need him.”

“well if you say so.” Said bean.

“trust me, I know what I’m doing, that and you two owe me for failing me during that bank robbery.” Said Fiona.

“true…” burt said back.

“now then, ready some shut eye?” asked nights.

“yep.” Said sonic.

“sure.” Said tails.

“now keep in mind the two of you may be split a part in this dream world. If this is the case try to stop some of wizemen’s evil minions in other parts and meet up at his zone.”

“got it.” said sonic giving a thumbs up before he closed his eyes. Tails, sonic, and Fiona outside closed their eyes and slept, all going into the dream world.

Back at eggman’s base, wizemen explained everything to eggman.

“so you want to use some of my robots to stop the hedgehog?” asked eggman.

“yes. Trust me on this deal eggman, for if I control all the mobion’s dreams, they will not want to sleep, and find themselves tired, tired enough to get captured by you.” said wizemen.

Eggman’s smile was bigger than a kid on Christmas eve.

“that plan is genus!” said eggman. “badnik’s! enter the dream portal and do anything and everything to stop sonic the hedgehog and any of his friends who join aside him! This plan is too good to slip up on or fail!” said eggman.

One by one, the robots entered the portal. Eggman smiled in glee.

“this time I win sonic…”

 

act 3:

 

Sonic’s story

sonic arrived in the dream world, sadly without tails by his side.

“be safe wherever you are tails…” he said after calling his name. He looked around the place. It looked sort of like the green hill zone but with rings floating here and there, and the sky was grey.

“huh, wired. This is the dream world though, so I mind as well get used to it while I’m here…” he said. Doctor eggman’s robots came out of the hills and started attacking sonic.

“well, here goes nothing…” he said.

Sonic easily destroyed the robots as usual, however, they rebuilt themselves and started attacking again.

“oh great, one of my few worst nightmares would come true in this world.” Sonic once again smashed the robots into pieces, only for those pieces to not only rebuild but multiply into more robots.

“I’ve seen enough mythiagical stories to know where this is going…” sonic said before dashing off from the robots.

Sonic got away from them only to be stopped by wizemen.

“running away already are we sonic?”

“I take it you’re wizemen” said sonic.

“a hologram, but yes, I am wizemen, the one and only. If you’re here, I take it nights has told you about my little dream emerald…”

“you bet…”

“and if you think you’re going to take it from me then you’re dead wrong hedgehog, even if doctor eggman wasn’t working with me I would crush you and you’re two tailed buddy in a matter of minutes. I’d do it quickly but what’s the fun in that?”

“why am I not surprised eggman is working with you?” asked sonic, with his arms crossed.

“spilled beans or not, you’re going to be splattered all over the place if you don’t turn back now mr.sonic.”

“no way.”

“suit yourself…” said wizemen disappearing. Sonic continued to run though the dream land.

“I better either find tails or get this dream emerald before he gets hurt.” Said sonic, as he continued to run towards wizemen’s castle.

 

Tails story:

Tails awoke on the ground with his head throbbing a bit.

“oh my head.” He looked around. The land he was in was wired. Everything was made out of food. The hills where cheesecakes, the sun was a giant cookie, tails couldn’t help but take some bites from the sweet food hills.

“well, this makes me glad that I tagged along in this adventure.”

Tails blood went colder than a normal winter day. He turned around to see Fiona standing by.

“w-what are you doing here?”

“before you say it, no, I’m not just a part of this dream. Me, bean and bart where outside snooping, when we saw what was going on. So I decided to join you’re dream and here I am.”

Fiona got closer to tails, who backed up a bit before Fiona grabbed him and put him close to her.

“admit it big guy, you’re glad I’m back and crossed over from the other world. You want me, I know you do.”

The sad thing was, Fiona was right. Tails didn’t know how she regained some of her memory, but he wish she didn’t.

“it’s all coming back to me now, You little pesky fox. You had a big crush on me. I might not remember much, but that’s what I remember the most. Now how about you and me ditch this dream world, and you join me, bean, and bart.”

“no…” said tails calmly.

“oh I don’t know tails, that actually sounds like a good idea…”

Tails and Fiona looked up to see Reala laying back in mid-air with his arms crossed looking down on the two.

“and who are you?” asked Fiona.

“names Reala, enemy of nights. Word in the dream world has it that some wild animals from mobious have decided to come and have some fun, along with trying to get a certain dream emerald wizemen has.”

“dream emerald?”

“this is why I wish you didn’t barge in…” said tails.

“don’t be so fast to say that tails, you just may need her…”

Reala sent a giant dark ball at the two, tails jumped out of the way.

“hey what’s the big idea!”

“sorry Fiona, but no people from sonic’s universe/zone/whatever allowed. Wizemen’s orders. Now then, let’s put you and you’re girlfriend to the test tails.

“she is not my girlfriend!” tails said back angrily.

“not yet…” Fiona added. Tails just gave her a look, then grabbed her hand and ran as Reala thew more dark balls at the two. The two hid behind the giant chocolate mountain.

“come out come out wherever you are…” said Reala.

Reala spotted them, but didn’t reveal it to them. Instead, he decided to give them a bit of bad news.

“gee, this food does look delicious. Shame this food also makes people sleepy.”

Tails got worried. “he’s gotta be bluffing” he whispered to Fiona. Sadly, he wasn’t. Soon, tails and Fiona started feeling sleepy. They tried to stay awake, but soon found themselves sleeping side by side, holding hands.

“aw, how cute…” said Reala, grabbing the two and flying away with them.

 

act 4:

 

 

Sonic’s story

Sonic continued to run though the dream land.

“he’s getting closer…” said wizemen. “but not for long…”

Before sonic knew it the ground beneath him turned wet and slippery. Soon, water was under him. Sonic tried swimming but sadly this was one thing he didn’t know how to do, even with sally trying to teach him how to.

“what’s the big idea!” said sonic, trying to stay a-float.

“what’s wrong sonic? A little water bringing you to a hault?”

“not cool wizeman…”

“oh boo hoo, I though hedgehogs were supposed to swim…oh well, enjoy the water sonic!”

“man I wish I had a boat.” Sonic said, still trying to stay above the surface. Soon, a motor boat appeared near sonic. He quickly got in it.

“thanks for the boat wizemen!” he said.

“that wasn’t me…that was you. You wished it up, and dreamed it.”

“well, I think things are going to be a bit easier from here on out…” sonic said with a smirk.

“you know what, you’re right sonic, here, let me make things more challenging.”

Giant waves started heading towards sonic’s boat. He quickly put the boat in gear and started driving threw them, hoping the boat wouldn’t tip over.

“hold on…I’m not done cranking up the waves just yet…” said wizemen. Indeed he was right, the waves got bigger and bigger.

Sonic thought up of a sub and got in it quickly.

“wise choice sonic, only thing is, I’ve got a little friend for you to meet…” said wizemen. Sonic heard a whale moan.

“oh you gotta be kidding me…”

Soon a giant whale with red eyes headed towards sonic’s sub.

“mep…” said sonic. He put his hands tightly on the steering wheel of the sub and put the petal to the metal. The whale chased him down, managing to bump into the sub a couple of times, trying to crash the blue hedgehog.

“you’re not going to catch me you over grown mammal!” he shouted back.

“that’s what you think!” said the whale.

“oh great, it can talk…” sonic said rolling his eyes.

“well of course I can talk this is a dream!”

The whale got more and more closer to crashing sonic. Sonic was heading to land though, almost reaching it.

“almost there…” he said. The whale finally pounced on the sub. The sub started sinking lower and lower.

“not this time!” sonic jumped out and managed to escape, and just made it to land.

“sonic 2, wizemen 0.”

“Don’t get too cocky now sonic, you still haven’t reached my castle, and I know 2 ladies who are going to make sure you don’t!”

Wizemen threw a giant orb at sonic, while it didn’t hurt, it did take sonic to a strange place full of blocks leading up. He was also wearing PJ’s.

“ok, who turned on the wired switch?”

“SONIC!”

sonic turned around. Looking at him were a giant sally and amy rose, looking angry.

“mep…”

 

Tails story

Tails woke up tied up to Fiona fox, who was also starting to wake up.

“wakey wakey love birds…” said Reala.

“ugh…” said tails

“you two are my prisoner’s now. You can’t escape, and I’m not going to let you escape and try to get the dream emerald. Worst part is, you two are most likely going to be trapped here forever…”

“what? You can’t do that!” said tails.

“oh I can. You two may be awake here, but in the real world you’ll be in a coma, never to wake up.”

“that’s what you think jack! I’m one dangerous fox, just ask my pal here.” Fiona said confidently.

“you two made a mistake coming here. In this world anything is possible, including me winning.”

Reala left the two in the room alone. This took tails by surprise.

“strange, I thought he would stay in here and keep watching us.”

“just goes to show how crummy of a villain he is…” said Fiona, who then got out a knife she had in her back pocket and got her and tails free.

“come on big guy, unless you’d like to stay in a coma for the rest of your days I suggest you work with me.”

“very well…” said tails, grabbing fiona’s hand as she pulled him up.

The two left the room, only to find Reala there waiting for them….

“sorry for leaving the room suddenly, just in case you thought I was going easy on you, here’s some robots from good old doctor eggman…” Reala said. Doctor eggman’s badnik’s charged at the duo. Fiona and tails  took them out, but just like with sonic they built themselves up and multiplied.

“I’m surprised doctor eggman hasn’t come up with such a great plan like this…” said Reala.

“just great, now what?” asked Fiona.

“come on…” said tails grabbing her hand and running. Reala chased them down along with the robots. The two then went into a room and closed the door.

“put stuff in front of the door! I’ll try looking for an exit…” said tails.

“you got it, just one problem…there’s nothing in here.” Said Fiona.

Indeed she was right. the room was blank.

“you think there’s a chance I can dream up a door to get out of here?”

Reala banged on the door.

“come out love birds…it’s time to face you’re doom…”

“at this point it’s worth a try…” said Fiona with a worried look.

“you can’t hide in there forever…” said Reala jiggling the door handle.

 

act 5:

 

Sonic’s story

 

“look you two…” sonic said looking nervously up at the two giant women. “I don’t know what this is all about but I can assure you it’s something I’m willing to discuss after I go defeat wizemen.”

Amy slammed her hammer down on the block sonic was standing, sonic jumped out of the way and started claiming the stairs to get away from them.

“Come back sonic, I just want to talk!” amy said angrily, slamming her hammer down on anther block.

Sally joined in on this slamming her fist down on a block.

“Get back here sonic! All’s amy wants to do is talk to you!”

“I’ll talk to her when she puts down the hammer!” said sonic. He soon regret saying this, as the two started slamming blocks like nobody’s business.

“me and my big mouth…” said sonic.

“wouldn’t be the 1^st time you used it to hurt me sonic the jerkhog!” Sally shouted.

Sonic eventually saw the door out.

“bingo.” He said. He quickly ran to it and made it just before amy or sally could grab him. He panted catching his breath.

“alright wizemen…what next…”

“well, glad to see you finally could make it…” said wizemen, with his arms crossed looking down on sonic.

Sonic looked around. The place he was at was dark, there wasn’t much light other than a few white lights and wizemen himself.

“welcome to my castle…”

“not really a castle, more of just a dark place.” Sonic said.

“exactly…” said wizemen. “this is where all dreams come to die, and where you’re going to be for a long time…I may not be able to kill you, but I can make sure that you’re in a coma for the rest of your days…just like with what Reala is trying to do to your poor pal tails and his friend Fiona…”

“fiona?” said sonic.

“a Fiona fox. You wouldn’t believe the people you’ll meet in the dream world.”

Sonic was more than worried now. Even if it was just a dream form he didn’t want the poor fox to deal with the same heart ache the real one had caused him.

“alright wizemen, I think it’s time you tell me where the dream emerald is…”

“if you want it, you’re going to have to defeat me for it…”

Sonic spin dashed at wizmen, but he disappeared before any contact was made. He tried again but once more wizemen wasn’t there.

“the old disappear before anyone can hit you trick huh?” said sonic.

“yes…it’s quite useful, especially to idiot hedgehogs like you…”

Wizemen soon blasted a combination of shadow orbs and doctor eggman’s robots at sonic, sonic tried to dodge them but he wasn’t so successful.

“give up hedgehog, you have no chance here in my world…”

“jumping to conclusions a bit too soon now are we?”

“I don’t think so…” said wizemen, blasting more orbs at sonic. Sonic imagined up a rock to hide behind.

“there’s nowhere to run or hide sonic…” said wizemen. He soon appeared right in front of the hedgehog, causing him to yelp a bit, and tossed him.

“you’ve failed hedgehog…”

“one little toss won’t put me down…” sonic said stumbling too his feet.

“how about some spikes then…” said wizemen, grabbing sonic and tossing him into a pit of spikes. Sonic though up of a platform to save him at the last second.

“there’s gotta be something I can do to defeat this guy…maybe I can turn super…” he thought.

Sonic dreamed up of some emeralds. He then closed his eyes and tried to channel the super form, but nothing happen.

“shame the power up won’t work in this world…” said wizemen throwing anther orb at sonic. Just then, sonic got an idea.

“I know something that will thought.” He closed his eyes. Once more anther orb hit sonic, and anther, tossing him back a lot.

“face it sonic, you’re not leaving this place with what you came here for…”

“funny thing is…” sonic said reveling that he had the emerald, “I already have it…”

Wizemen couldn’t believe his eyes. There it was, the dream emerald in sonic’s hand.

“how…” he asked.

“let’s just say it came to me in a dream.” Sonic said. The emerald glowed and a door with an exit sign in wired shapes and different colors appeared. This was perfect timing, as wizemen was 200% angry.

“IF YOU THINK I’M GOING TO LOOSE TO YOU THIS EASILY HEDGEHOG YOU’RE WRONG!” he said. His floating hands tried grabbing the hedgehog but sonic dodged them.

“and if you think you’re going to kick my friend Nights out of this world for good then YOU’RE wrong.”

Sonic jumped thought the door and immediately woke up.

“sonic you ok?” nights asked.

“yeah.” he said, showing he had the dream emerald in his hand.

 

Tails story

Tails and Fiona made it thought the door, which then disappeared. They found themselves in a white area, with nothing other than shapes and outlines of hills and other objects.

“how do I get myself into messes like this?” tails said.

“oh cheer up, I’ve had it worse.” Said Fiona.

“how so?” said tails, giving her a dirty look. “besides, you’re the one who had a powerful group and betrayed the freedom fighters.”

“you don’t know why I did it thought…why I truly did it. you see tails, I was a wreak. You’re freedom fighters abandon me at doctor robotnik’s camp, I never found my parents, even when we got back to anti-mobious Scourage was acting like a control freak. To the genesis wave’s credit it happen just when he was about to flip his stuff and attack us again.”

Tails sighed and felt like the biggest jerk on the planet. He didn’t know that Fiona went thought all of that, but hearing this made him understand what made her snap. He went over and hugged Fiona tightly.

“I’m sorry…” he said.

Fiona was a bit shocked, but at the same time touched by the fox’s hug.

“it’s ok tails, you didn’t know, and I was in a bad state of mind at the time.” she said, petting the fox on the head.

“how touching…” said Reala.

“great…this clown again…” said Fiona.

“insult me all you want, but “this clown” is going to be making sure you’re here for a long, long, time.”

Reala started throwing fire balls at the duo, who got out of the way of them in time.

“I think it’s time we take this jerk out together…” said Fiona, putting her hand out to tails.

“let’s do this…” he said grabbing it. tails then flew to the sky, dodging the fire balls. Fiona leaped and kicked Reala right in the face, knocking him down.

Fioan then kicked him once more.

“You messed with the wrong foxes freak.” She said.

“you really think I’m going to give up so easily?”

Fiona punched him back once more, sending him flying.

“ugh…” he said, holding his head. “fine…but be warned…don’t be surprised if wizemen wants you’re head on a silver platter.”

He then flew off. A door then popped up with the word exit over it.

“I guess this is the end of our adventures…” said Fiona, walking over to the door with tails.

“and that we’re going to have to be enimies again…”

“maybe…who knows, maybe if you press the write buttons, I’ll be a good girl again…” she said booping the foxes nose.

“see you soon…oh, and here’s my apology gift for slapping you…” fiona grabbed tails and kissed him right on the lips. Tails kissed back blushing, and after that, she parted…

“apology accepted…” he said, before walking though the door.

 

Aftermath

Fiona woke up. She got up and started walking.

“so what happen?” asked bean.

“oh nothing, nothing that interesting.”

“so did you convince him to join our side?” bart asked.

“you could say that…” said Fiona. “come on, let’s see who else decided to join me in this world.”

Back at freedom fighters HQ nights thanked sonic and tails greatly for stopping wizemen.

“it was our pleasure.”

“thank you for also saving Reala too tails.”

“no problem..” tails said.

“well, I’m heading back to the dream world, see you two hopefully soon.”

The duo waved and said goodbye to nights, as she flew off.

“so tails…did you see anybody you knew in the dream world?”

“uh…no…” tails said nervously. Before sonic could grill him anymore, sally and Nicole walked out to them.

“what are you two doing out here?” asked sally.

“and what’s that in your hand?” asked Nicole.

“it’s a long story…or dream in this case…” said sonic.

 

Later that night

Fiona fox watched the moon and thought to herself.

“sorry to leave you again tails, now’s not the time to be around me. she said to herself. “once again I’m a wreak, and all because I broke my own “can’t count on anybody” rule. Thanks a lot scourage…” she said, trying to stop a tear from falling.

 

[Skye Prower 386]

Seeing as I'm doing a bit of criticism around here I shouldn't miss you're out Teamrandom.

This was a fun little story, somewhat reminiscent of the early comic adventures.  However, I'm afraid there are quite a few issues with it.

First, it really needs a re-draft.  There are several errors with the grammar, punctuation etc, most noticeable about half the capital letters are small case.  Words are frequently wrong too, such as 'layer' instead of 'lair'.  

The story also feels a little... rushed to read.  There is little description, what is written appears to be the minimum needed to make the story work.  Almost like each sentence is merely a bullet point.  It is bare bones, but there's nothing to flesh out the story to make it more complete.  This is something that as you write more you'll no doubt pick up.

But the biggest criticism I have is that, except for Sonic who you were mostly spot on with, is that a lot of the Character's felt Out Of Character.  Eggman came across more like his Sonic X or Boom version as opposed to the Comic, Bark was speaking (at least, I assume it was meant to be Bark as his name was "Bart" in the story) and the way you had Fiona, a 16 year old, interact with Tails, who is.. 8 post-G-wave... is rather squeaky.  And on the subject of the G-wave, it is meant to be a near-apocalyptic event that only a few Freedom Fighter have even vague memories of.  In this story it is treated more like a mild inconvenience that pretty much everyone knows of.

Still, I think with practice you will undoubtedly be able to do better.

[teamrandom21 26]

Seeing as I'm doing a bit of criticism around here I shouldn't miss you're out Teamrandom.

This was a fun little story, somewhat reminiscent of the early comic adventures.  However, I'm afraid there are quite a few issues with it.

First, it really needs a re-draft.  There are several errors with the grammar, punctuation etc, most noticeable about half the capital letters are small case.  Words are frequently wrong too, such as 'layer' instead of 'lair'.  

The story also feels a little... rushed to read.  There is little description, what is written appears to be the minimum needed to make the story work.  Almost like each sentence is merely a bullet point.  It is bare bones, but there's nothing to flesh out the story to make it more complete.  This is something that as you write more you'll no doubt pick up.

But the biggest criticism I have is that, except for Sonic who you were mostly spot on with, is that a lot of the Character's felt Out Of Character.  Eggman came across more like his Sonic X or Boom version as opposed to the Comic, Bark was speaking (at least, I assume it was meant to be Bark as his name was "Bart" in the story) and the way you had Fiona, a 16 year old, interact with Tails, who is.. 8 post-G-wave... is rather squeaky.  And on the subject of the G-wave, it is meant to be a near-apocalyptic event that only a few Freedom Fighter have even vague memories of.  In this story it is treated more like a mild inconvenience that pretty much everyone knows of.

Still, I think with practice you will undoubtedly be able to do better.

thanks. i'll be posting more stories from sonic multiverse on here, and hopefully they will improve.

appologise for any sort of cringe worthy moments. the tails and fiona thing. basically, the story is in the opposite direction to what archie is doing. everything from pre-genesis is cannon, but after that it's on it's own (the story.)

basically, pre-genesis characters can come back, more details about this will be later reveled

apologize again about the squeaky moment there, fiona fox is 12 in sonic multiverse, i could have sworn i written it somewhere, but i'm not 100% sure.

Edited 31 Dec 2015 by teamrandom21

[Skye Prower 386]

Hmm, in that case, you might want to post up an 'introduction' story, trying to make as many points about your AU clear to the audience as possible.  That'll save any continuity mix ups.